Kemiroch’s Show Floor Submissions
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Well that was … informative. It seems I have a ways to go yet, but at least the song is out there for people to play.
Completed Songs
Nothing at this time.
No reserved list yet.
Rejected Songs:
The Rolling Stones – Brown Sugar
Thanks for your consideration.
Triage pass: This is intended to give you some quick feedback, and give potential sponsors an idea of how much work it would take to make this a C3 release. If nobody picks it up by September 26, please release it in your own Other Customs thread.
GUITAR
8.3.50 YG not RG
14.1.50, 14.2 BY not BR (same progression as M12)
M27.3 this Y G R B sounds more like G R B Y (also 31.3, etc)
38.3 YR not BR
40.2.50 still YR
41.4.50 OY not OB
50.3 YR YO not YB YO (done correctly at 54.3)
68.4.50 GR GR GR GY GY then 69.4.50 RY is OK
76.4.50 3 quick chords here
80.2.50 these 3 are still YB
82.2.50 YO O not YO Y
83.2.75 start at 83.3 instead
85.1.50 i think there’s another strum here (also 85.3.50)
86.1.50 GR not GY
90.4 missing maybe RY GR
103.1.50 i think these 5 go RY RB RY RY RB
106.1.50 these 4 are same as 105.1.50
111 in this whole solo section you’ve got something like GR B R Y, but the pitch is descending – it feels more like YB B Y R G to me
BASS
5.4.50 this O is actually G – he does that early note thing quite often
6.3.50 ascending bass – not charted
30.2.50 The ascending pattern begins here
(these 3 issues continue throughout)
VOCALS
Tube length isn’t correct. You should be using scrub mode to see where syllables start and end. Syllables should be aligned to a 1/64 grid. Details on the first few phrases:
19.1.06 Gold ends here
19.3.12 slave ends here
20.1.31 cot- ends here
20.2 ton ends here
23.1.18 Scarred trails off – end it here
23.2.50 slav-(E) not ©
23.3.12 slav- trails off – end it here
23.3.37 er should begin here
24.2 all should end here
24.3.31 right(E) not (D)
25.4 en© just(E) a-(Bb) round© mid-© night(A) +(G)
DRUMS
seemed okay
OVERALL:
A 7/10 isn’t quite fair – guitar will be okay with those fixes. Maybe a 7.5.
Hey thanks Nyx! That’s the best feedback I’ve ever gotten in my life, I think. I will get started on these changes right away.
Here is an updated project:
http://www.mediafire.com/view/lz4z09c16 … garht2.RPP
All the other files should be the same.
This version contains all the guitar fixes, and the first few vocals fixes.
*Edit: It also has some venue improvements, if that means anything
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